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Talented writer Eliot Heynes was also a former teacher of Egyptology and a hopeless apprentice of hermetic magic. Most of all, he was an addict: a vicious smoker, platonic lover and well on his way to an heroine overdose.

Inspiration gone, he spent frustrating hours looking at his black cat Lovecraft running across the floor and climbing the furniture. Day after day, Eliot dreamt wide awake until he saw himself inside a deserted room. He knew that next to him was his muse and she was exactly like he had imagined her.

At last, Eliot wrote and, surprisingly, his lazy talent could not stop writing. For weeks, that ethereal woman danced and whispered to him in an ancient language that only he could understand. Autumn was her favorite time of the year. Once, he held her hand, but never knew her name.

One night, still swinging his pen, Eliot fell on his desk, struck dead by a thunderous heart attack. His strange last line of poetry was "Sun Moon Efreet".
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For *BerylAlexandros's *Writers-Workshop as explained in this news [link]

I needed to write some sort of background for a roleplaying character, so I used this prompt to get something going.
Write something that contains the line "[Fall or Autumn] was her favorite time of the year."
To me, this phrase seems obviously romantic, so I immediately went for something different - focusing on the symbolism of Autumn - in order to make it more interesting.

edited after *BerylAlexandros's comment


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First things first: I think that "Once, he hold her hand" is probably meant to read "Once, he held her hand".

This is quite interesting. I like how short it is, and how ethereal it feels. And the symbolic usage of the line was an interesting approach.

What I'm wondering about is that last line, "Sun Moon Efreet." Is it supposed to mean something to the reader? Maybe it just went over my head.

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Thank you for the prompt feedback.

It sure is 'held'. That was a mistake left in when the phrase was repeatedly edited. No one said short pieces are easy :) I have corrected it.

"Sun Moon Efreet" is what the writer decides to call his muse and the reader can only guess if there is any specific significance related to Eliot's background in the occult and History. I think it may also remain a mystery, which I feel works well with such an abrupt ending.

I'm happy you liked the size of the piece. Usually, I'm told that something this small can't avoid being obscure and shallow, but I did try to do my best with every little phrase. Thanks again.

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