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The circus band plays "The Colour of Your Dress"
The host throws quotes from "Dreams You Forget"
Your ice-cream melts in a blissful mess.

A magician calls out and you say yes
And he shows you the trick of "The Invisible Pet".
The circus band plays "The Colour of Your Dress".

A stallion jumps over shadows of chess
A roaring tiger rips out your regret
Your ice-cream melts in a blissful mess.

An old fiddler sings "To the Devil I Confess"
With one good eye blinking red and wet.
The circus band plays "The Colour of Your Dress".

A clown imitates your kind distress
And trades your kiss for a potion of sweat.
Your ice-cream melts in a blissful mess.

You try to love it even just a bit less
But the host insists it is not over yet.
The circus band plays "The Colour of Your Dress"
Your ice-cream melts in a blissful mess.
I have a little more time to write this month, so I've decided to tackle the poetry litmas (and a few more contests :) and this week's workshop).

I feel this is a somewhat demanding challenge - using many decisive criteria - but, fortunately, I have done my poetry homework this year :D thanks to the good people of the *Writers-Workshop and to Villanelle expert =Mattiello.

Personally, I still don't like formal poetry (sorry Aditi :blush:) but I must agree that it is a good exercise. Ultimately, it is easier to write than free verse.

You can also listen to this poem at the Dangers of Poetry podcast.
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Liduen-Kvaedhi Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2009
I remember this poem from one of the Writers-Slam broadcasts and I found myself listening to it over and over again. Excellent.
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RickDanger Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. The Writers-Slam is an awesome project.
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Liduen-Kvaedhi Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2009
I agree!
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bekkia Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2009
I HATE writing this kind of poem, so I give you uber props on it. (What a literary sentence I've just created.) Anywho, congrats on the second place. Well deserved. :) Which calendar ya pickin'?
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RickDanger Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. We all had some great pieces.

I also have mixed feelings regarding formal poetry :D I'm picking the "Boy and His Robot" - and you?
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bekkia Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2009
Uh, I think i picked some one with black and white photos I forget the name of. lol.
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RoseOfChaos Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
umm... I'm not really one to talk about repetetive stuff, but maybe the line "your ice-cream melts in a blissful mess" could be used a little less? It's like the really awesome song on the radio that gets played just one time too many.

I really like it anyway!
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RickDanger Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading. I'm glad you liked it.
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RoseOfChaos Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah, no problem!
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RickDanger Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
This is a villanelle, a formal poem where a couplet (those last two lines) alternates in repetition.
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